Thursday, September 30, 2010

Romantic/Comedy Treatment

An average day in class. People sleeping, texting, and just day dreaming. And then there's me.

The smartest kid in high school. Writing down everything the teacher is saying, organizing all my A+ papers,  adjusting my over-sized glasses...the usual.

And then she walks in...

Flowing curly hair, golden eyes, perfect body, the whole package really.

As she gives a note to the teacher, she looks at me and winks at me.

Even when the bell rang, I was still in utter shock.

I decide to work up my courage and ask her out to the school dance. I decide to walk up to her table and ask her out point blank.

As I'm walking towards her table, I get a thought of something.

She says yes, she gives me a kiss, and becomes my girlfriend.

Every possible good emotion engulfs me, and I walk to her table with great confidence.

Just a few feet from her table, the school jock beats me to her and asks her out to the dance. He looks at me and gives that smile as if he's won.

Just before she's about to say her answer, I let out all my feelings about her; everything from how I liked her since 1st grade, how helping her with homework was the best time in my life, etc.

This catches her off guard and now she's actually thinking

Then she looks at me and says "I pick you."

Then I wake up.


  1. This seems like it would be a great idea for a potential film. I think it would also a great idea if we took this treatment and combined it with mine. That way we could get a film that would mix Romantic Comedy with Magical Realism.

  2. It is a very interesting ending. when he gets the note i thought that he would be to happy to see her to even read the note. it would have been interesting if when he asks her out then she sais to read the note. the note would have said stop starring at me. we cant all have happy endings.